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which the re- and precise language and precise language. piece to convey ideas guage to convey ideas incorrect language.
sponse exhibits with a noticeable " Shows consistent use and information. and information. " Relies on run-ons or
effective use of sense of voice. of sentences that are " Relies on sentences " Relies on sentences sentence fragments.
words, sentence " Makes effective use of varied in length and that are unvaried in that lack variety in
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tence variety to length to convey ideas. and may be con-
convey ideas. structed incorrectly.
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paragraphing,
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to help you proofread or edit before you submit a final copy. But if you take advantage of the opportunity to
peer review the work you do every day, to become alert about how you write and the mistakes you commonly
make, as well as the suggestions of others about how to improve your work, you will become more astute at
proofing your own test work.
There are several peer review sheets at the end of this book which you should try to use routinely before
you hand in a written assignment. You will notice that they all refer to things like thesis statement, para-
graph development, word choice, and even conventions. You can modify them to match the requirements
of a particular assignment. For example, if the assignment requires that you write about Hamlet s soliloquy
and select at least three references to death and dying, then you can add that criteria to the peer review sheet
to make sure your reader picks up whether or not you have addressed this in your finished piece.
Finally, there is no magic bullet to help you express yourself. Reading insightfully, acquiring good vocab-
ulary, recognizing logic, and preparing well-organized papers are all skills that have to be worked at.
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Real writing takes shape during revision. You ll want to use the peer review forms found here to check and
revise your work to make it the best it can be.
Peer Review 1
1. Does the first paragraph get your interest? What details, information, quotation accomplishes this?
What, if anything, is still needed?
2. At the end of the first paragraph, do you know what the thesis is? Express the thesis in the author s
words or your own.
3. As the author tells the story, are the details vivid and interesting? Point out several good ones.
4. Is there a logical time sequence? What transition words or phrases capture the sense of time?
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5. Are more details needed anywhere? If so, explain.
6. Are there any good comparisons (similes and metaphors)? List them below.
7. Are you satisfied with the conclusion? Does it restate the opening? If you think it could be better,
please write it out.
8. Do you see any serious grammatical errors? Circle the places where you think there is an error. Give
suggestions for better wording.
Peer Review 2
1. Does the introduction effectively identify the issue, engage the reader s interest, provide needed back-
ground, and provide the writer s thesis? How might the writer improve the introduction? Suggest a
quotation, statistic, or anecdote.
2. If the introduction predicts the organization of the paper, do the body paragraphs follow the thesis
statement? Do you ever have trouble seeing the purpose or function of the paragraphs? Can you cir-
cle the transition words or phrases?
3. Identify places where the prose is confusing or unclear. In particular, look at abrupt transitions, gaps
in arguments, tangled sentences, or other places where you get lost.
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4. Is each paragraph well-developed? Is there a good topic sentence with at least three supporting sen-
tences? Is there a clear transition from paragraph to paragraph?
5. Does the conclusion restate the introduction?
6. What are the main strengths of the paper? Underline one or more important phrases.
7. What are at least two changes the writer should consider making?
Peer Review 3
1. What is the thesis statement? Copy it below.
2. How many paragraphs make up this essay?
3. Is the first paragraph an effective introduction? What introduction strategy does the writer use
that is, quotation, statistic, or anecdote?
4. Is each body paragraph adequately developed? What evidence is used to support the thesis? Is the
evidence compelling? Select one or two pieces of supporting information that you think are very good.
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5. Which parts of the essay do you find most effective? Cite a specific sentence, paragraph, or example
to support your opinion.
6. What did you learn from this essay?
7. Make one suggestion for improvement.
8. Read over for the conventions of standard written English; circle errors, but do not make corrections.
That is the writer s job.
Revision Guidelines for Self Evaluation
Before submitting your work, check the following:
1. Can you underline your thesis statement?
2. Does each paragraph begin with a recognizable topic sentence that introduces a major point to be
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